Talk:SS-Begleitkommando des Führers/GA1
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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 20:17, 7 September 2019 (UTC)
I'll get to this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 20:17, 7 September 2019 (UTC)
- Fine. No hurry. Kierzek (talk) 23:00, 7 September 2019 (UTC)
- No DABs
- Images appropriately licensed
- Can you add a picture of the Wolfschanze; not one showing the conference room after the bomb attack?
Done - Lede is too short Done
- Remember that it's supposed to a summary, not giving exact details like the number of men on duty. Try and summarize each paragraph in one or two sentences. Done
- Remember that it's supposed to a summary, not giving exact details like the number of men on duty. Try and summarize each paragraph in one or two sentences.
- Link Berlin, Munich, Vienna, Soviet Done
- the current FBK chief acted as his deputy delete "current" Done
- Later pursuant to Kempka's directive a fully armor plated Mercedes awkward Done See what you think.
- FBK and RSD men were used to check the names of visitors with the daily log books. Unclear. Do you mean investigate the people scheduled to meet Hitler, or merely validating the visitors with the schedule? If the latter, that's pretty much standard and can be deleted. Done, I tweaked it as to be more specific of the FBK role. Neither the FBK or the RSD investigated the people scheduled to meet Hitler. That fell to the Gestapo and the SD. Kierzek (talk) 20:18, 14 September 2019 (UTC)
- OK, but that's what security guards do everywhere; I don't think that deserves to be covered here. Done
- OK, but that's what security guards do everywhere; I don't think that deserves to be covered here.
- Soviet artillery shelling of the area "...shelling of the area by Soviet artillery" Done
- the Soviet Red Army ring around the centre government sector of Berlin awkward Done
- Don't capitalize North Done
- There's a lot of overlap here with the Adolf Hitler's bodyguard article.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 15:58, 14 September 2019 (UTC)
- The overlap is due to a couple of reasons. The subject of this article is a unit included in the "Hitler's bodyguard article" as to be expected. Also, I was a main contributor of that article and co-nom when it was reviewed for GA; therefore, overlap exists. If you would like some of the overlap removed herein, I will be glad to do it. Kierzek (talk) 19:27, 14 September 2019 (UTC)
- No, I think that the problem is more on the other end. I'd rename Adolf Hitler's bodyguard as Adolf Hitler's personal security and use that more as a capstone article for this one and the RSD article.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 23:08, 14 September 2019 (UTC)
- Normally, changing an article as titled, especially one that passed GA with that title, is not something I would readily agree to, but I must say in this case that article being titled "Adolf Hitler's personal security", is more descriptive. So, you may would to mention it on that talk page, accordingly. Kierzek (talk) 01:13, 15 September 2019 (UTC)
- No, I think that the problem is more on the other end. I'd rename Adolf Hitler's bodyguard as Adolf Hitler's personal security and use that more as a capstone article for this one and the RSD article.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 23:08, 14 September 2019 (UTC)
- The overlap is due to a couple of reasons. The subject of this article is a unit included in the "Hitler's bodyguard article" as to be expected. Also, I was a main contributor of that article and co-nom when it was reviewed for GA; therefore, overlap exists. If you would like some of the overlap removed herein, I will be glad to do it. Kierzek (talk) 19:27, 14 September 2019 (UTC)
